Thanks for these comments... I seem to more often forget well trodden
revision and editing procedures... perhaps this list acts as a way of
making this conscious memory again
in my terminology, fragments are clause chains which carry and create
affects, which is to say voice as clause chains are affects.
Sentences break through to writing and grammar which seems to stifle
any affect that may peak out from the gravity of prose sentence
writing... a sentence is a period in jail, locked up and found guilty of
a felony.
So, the revisions can proceed from here (after the really ugly stuff has
been sent to the delete command)
On 21/05/13 00:52, Douglas Barbour wrote:
> FWIW Chris
>
> The fragments work best at getting a sense of the passion across. The full sentences may need some trimming, but that's in you, for you....
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