A hard manner to get all that longing in, though perhaps the right one. What happened in stanza 4? I think you can find a way to maintain...
Doug
On 2012-10-31, at 3:57 AM, Patrick McManus <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Ah Bill all that longing
> cheers
> old mildewed P lounging
>
> -----Original Message-----
> From: Poetryetc: poetry and poetics [mailto:[log in to unmask]] On
> Behalf Of Bill Wootton
> Sent: 30 October 2012 20:56
> To: [log in to unmask]
> Subject: Homesick Villanelle
>
> The thoughts here were summoned by a trip thirty years ago. My recent trip
> has me homesick for France and it's not my home.
>
> Homesick Villanelle
>
> How can a gum tree arouse such longing?
> Twin eucalyptus wafts cannon nosewards.
> In another land, there's no belonging.
>
> Hankering for the familiar, aching.
> It's a visceral thing, not in your head.
> How can a gum tree arouse such longing?
>
> Irish lips lift but eyes are not smiling.
> Plastic mattress protector on your bed.
> In another land, there's no belonging.
>
> A cavernous hole inside you yawning.
> On Bloomsday you will be offal offered.
> Your desire for the familiar, aching.
>
> Unannounced, a sudden sharp craving.
> Your Guinness tastes bitter, try wine instead.
> In another land, there's no belonging.
>
> Sense of ill placement, utterly wrenching.
> You'd give anything to escape this dread.
> How can a gum tree arouse such longing?
> In another land, there's no belonging.
>
>
> Bill Wootton
> 29.10.12=
>
Douglas Barbour
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