Excellent, Max. in stanza 7, should 'will' be added to the third line, or perhaps 'be' be withdrawn from the
fourth?
This poem speaks to a traveller.
Bill
On 12/09/2012, at 2:15 AM, Max Richards <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
The Afterlife
[from a phrase by John Burnside]
'The afterlife has been
discontinued'.
Management wishes
to apologize.
Management,
be it known,
has also been
discontinued.
On whose say-so?
Word has got around.
Virtual connection
will be restored
as soon as
conditions permit.
As if such a promise
can be entertained.
Apocalypse?
it's been costed -
permanent deferral
seems advisable.
Redemption coupons -
withdrawn -
no longer
be redeemable.
You are not
connected.
Incorrect
password.
On whose say-so?
The system has spoken.
On Wed, Sep 12th, 2012 at 10:15 AM, Max Richards <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> The Afterlife
>
> [from a phrase by John Burnside]
>
> 'The afterlife has been
> discontinued'.
> Management wishes
> to apologize.
>
> Management,
> be it known,
> has also been
> discontinued.
>
> On whose say-so?
> Word has got around.
>
> Virtual connection
> will be restored
> as soon as
> conditions permit.
>
> As if such a promise
> can be entertained.
>
> Apocalypse?
> it's been costed -
> permanent deferral
> seems advisable.
>
> Redemption coupons -
> withdrawn -
> no longer
> be redeemable.
>
> You are not
> connected.
> Incorrect
> password.
>
> On whose say-so?
> The system has spoken.
>
>
>
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