Good li'l poem, Max, but I would definitely stop at 'breakfast' - it makes
a good point to finish. After that, it doesn't matter.
Andrew
On 4 July 2012 12:18, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Max, I like 'assertive, puny'. Do you need 'wimp' after that?
> I can guess which one was soon breathless of the leashed together couple.
> Isn't it 'Everyone is...' or does it change with 'else'? 'are' just looks
> funny to me.
>
> Cheers,
> Bill
>
> On 04/07/2012, at 1:05 PM, Max Richards <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
> > Weather Eye
> >
> > We're traipsing,
> > dog and human,
> > round the park lake,
> >
> > alert for raindrops and
> > the darkening drift
> > of rainclouds.
> >
> > Everyone else,
> > dogs and humans,
> > are in raincoats,
> >
> > some with umbrellas
> > pessimistically
> > at the ready.
> >
> > My neighbour's
> > Jack Russell, Buddy,
> > assertive, puny,
> >
> > looks such a wimp
> > in his hoodie -
> > which reads
> >
> > along the spine:
> > I'm tougher
> > than I look.
> >
> > If there were dog-
> > umbrellas, Buddy
> > would be toting one.
> >
> > We're not tough,
> > in the shadowing
> > first shower,
> >
> > trotting home now,
> > leashed together,
> > at a fast clip,
> >
> > one of us
> > soon breathless,
> > for late breakfast.
> >
> > From the chilly
> > rain-spotted balcony
> > we can see
> >
> > Monterey pines
> > flinching; beyond,
> > with the mind's eye,
> >
> > see the park lake
> > in such weather
> > getting wetter and Wetter.
> >
> >
> > Max Richards
> > Rufffey Lake Park yet again
> > Doncaster, Vic.
> >
> >
>
--
Andrew
http://hispirits.blogspot.com/
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