Two out of two, Doug. The colon of course and the smoke line was his, delivered as wryly as his damaged face
would permit.
On Thu, Jun 28th, 2012 at 2:02 AM, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Sounds like that sharp ending was his, but you utilized it well, & it
> follows perfectly from the previous stanza.
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> Small point, but I'd put a colon after 'metaphor abounds' so that the next
> two lines dont jar so much but follow...
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> Doug
> On 2012-06-26, at 6:37 PM, Bill Wootton wrote:
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> > all's been in readiness for some time now.
> > bedside hospital hours all done.
> > photos and memories, browsed and bruised.
> >
> > each available progeny has prepared
> > two or three A4 sheets of 'special memories'
> > to share with those of us still living.
> >
> > metaphor abounds.
> > new rooms entered,
> > reefs beyonded.
> >
> > the mayoress assured him
> > only a fortnight ago,
> > he'd be back.
> >
> > yeah, he croaked,
> > from the good half
> > of his stroke afflicted lips,
> >
> > as
> > smoke
> > signals.
> >
> >
> > Bill Wootton 27.6.12
> >
>
> Douglas Barbour
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