I am going to think on this
but you are right that he is oddly (?) passive aggressive
he's uncomfortable to work with
like having indigestion
ta!
L
On Thu, May 24, 2012 19:29, Douglas Barbour wrote:
> It's interesting, Lawrence, that it demonstrates,to me, how to utilize
> that 'is' for character (d)effect. I could see altering, say the first
> line of that 3rd stanza to 'No doubt he is free of men' & on, but this
> way of stretching it out also argues an oddly passive (aggressive) stance
> both for his religion & against others (at least as I read it).
>
> I would, in my own work (& therefore in my eitorial reading) go against
> the 'is' as such, but, obviously, one can use iot for certain specific
> purposes...
>
> As here.
>
>
> Doug
> On 2012-05-24, at 11:11 AM, Lawrence Upton wrote:
>
>
>> thank you, sheila
>>
>> I am not sure about the third stanza myself
>>
>>
>> it's more a memo for future writing perhaps
>>
>> but i wasn't sure
>>
>> so...
>>
>> thus, thanks!
>>
>> L
>>
>>
>> On Thu, May 24, 2012 18:47, Sheila Murphy wrote:
>>
>>> I hear this delicious piece quite vividly, and I appreciate it!
>>> First two stanzas, especially, are great.
>>> On Thu, May 24, 2012 at 9:44 AM, Lawrence Upton <[log in to unmask]>
>>> wrote:
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>>> Elidius laughs, ecstatic, flame, joy fuelled
>>>> who has known the inverse of bright being, wandering it in intimate
>>>> exploration, patient with the blockage. Like a trapped fly; and as
>>>> ceaseless, always, having escaped.
>>>>
>>>> He burns on the heights of the inner head.
>>>> In a cavernous undercroft beneath him,
>>>> he mourns; and is cursed; and is failing, falling in hate
>>>> reinforcing itself, as does a fire when ash accumulates.
>>>>
>>>> There is no doubt that he is free of men;
>>>> but he is doubtless cut off the same, the whole race, herding, such
>>>> as is here, keeping him back by simple derision.
>>>>
>>>> -----
>>>> Lawrence Upton
>>>> Visiting Fellow, Music Dept,
>>>> Goldsmiths, University of London
>>>> New Cross, London SE14 6NW
>>>> ----
>>>>
>>>>
>>>>
>>>
>>
>>
>> -----
>> Lawrence Upton
>> Visiting Fellow, Music Dept,
>> Goldsmiths, University of London
>> New Cross, London SE14 6NW
>> ----
>>
>>
>
> Douglas Barbour
> [log in to unmask]
>
> http://www.ualberta.ca/~dbarbour/
> http://eclecticruckus.wordpress.com/
>
>
> Latest books:
> Continuations & Continuations 2 (with Sheila E Murphy)
> http://www.uap.ualberta.ca/UAP.asp?LID=41&bookID=962
> Wednesdays'
> http://abovegroundpress.blogspot.com/2008/03/new-from-aboveground-press_10
> .html
>
>
>
> Why can’t words mean what they say?
>
>
> Robert Kroetsch
>
>
>
>
>
>
>
>
>
>
>
>
>
>
-----
Lawrence Upton
Visiting Fellow, Music Dept,
Goldsmiths, University of London
New Cross, London SE14 6NW
----
|