Sage indeed. From my 12th grade English teacher, Mrs. Zansky. She saw something in me--talent and too damn many words.
K
On May 25, 2012, at 1:17 AM, Andrew Burke wrote:
> yep, sage advice. Andrew
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> On 25 May 2012 12:55, Kenneth Wolman <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
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>> As my former President said, It depends on what Is Is. Something like
>> that. But yes, there is a point here and removing "is" doesn't do anything
>> negative. Is so. I looked back at some of my old stuff, I mean
>> pre-Poetryetc, and it's much more ornate and less "prosaic." I like the
>> spare-sounding me. Just get to the damn point, Ken…. Long ago someone gave
>> me one bit of writing advice: "Murder your darlings." Maybe I'm starting to
>> figure that out--lose the excess words.
>>
>> K
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>> On May 24, 2012, at 11:17 PM, Andrew Burke wrote:
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>>> Doug was spot on with the 'is's - but we all have different accents,
>> don't
>>> we, so often how I'd say it is vastly different to how others hear it. I
>>> have an Irish friend who writes fairly prosaic lines at times but when
>> you
>>> hear him read them, they sing like angels (he's an Irish devil, of
>> course).
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>>> But it's a 'moving' poem in more ones than one.
>>>
>>> Andrew
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>>> On 24 May 2012 22:46, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
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>>>> Well, that's supposed to be the way to snap, ken, so good on ya. If I
>> did
>>>> make any change now, it would be to remove the 'is's in the first 2
>> lines...
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>>>> 'haunted/back' works especially well....
>>>>
>>>> Doug
>>>> On 2012-05-23, at 6:56 PM, Kenneth Wolman wrote:
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>>>>> Everything tends toward farewell.
>>>>> The apartment is clean at last.
>>>>> The cat is fed and stoned on catnip.
>>>>> The lease will be signed on Friday.
>>>>> And I will be gone from here
>>>>> where nothing but memories haunted
>>>>> back to the old place to build
>>>>> new hauntings.
>>>>>
>>>>> KTW
>>>>>
>>>>
>>>> Douglas Barbour
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>> http://abovegroundpress.blogspot.com/2008/03/new-from-aboveground-press_10.html
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>>>> Why can’t words mean what they say?
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>>>> Robert Kroetsch
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