Y'know I think I like the longer lines too (but with required word
separation). And no medial comma in line one I guess. The shorter lines
look too much like the kind of thing you used to see in little magazines
when they existed (I know they still do, but somewhat posthumously)
On 5 December 2011 15:23, Dominic Fox <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> for life togetherfor yvonne, for lilafor the end of time
> convivial as eight-part harmony's irradiantorange and blue-violet
> dazzling and abandonedas chords of resonancehalo the strident
> moloch-faced brass statuesuddenly overwhelmed with flowers
>
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