I like this for its short, sharp action, Lawrence.
The earlier one perhaps included too much thought about...? The good sudden moments enclosed somewhat...
Doug
On 2011-12-29, at 9:32 AM, Lawrence Upton wrote:
> From the right of the slipway, and across
> halfway, and to the bar centre; between
> the porth and cove, threads of rotten tapestry
> now disintegrating, thrown on the floor.
>
> At their end, they swivel back, a short length
> which meets a straight edge coming from the north.
> Between these, under the flattened wigwam,
> large pebbles, weeds, but mostly disturbed sand.
>
> Above, grey at each side the bar’s high waist;
> and, further still, chaos of browned over
> rocks, taking hold of all the rising east.
>
> Round the south curve from bar into island,
> ground cover of seaweed tangled stranded
> layering its bright sun shimmering darkness.
>
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