Don't be sorry dear L -it's just the deranged comments from an elderly
deranged elder P
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Sent: 01 December 2011 10:20
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Subject: Re: The bar between The Gugh and St Agnes, seen from St Agnes
Dear Patrick
> Like the heavy pushing crowd image cheers P
Ta
I thought, as I came up with it, that it was inappropriate; and then just
how appropriate it is
> 'the intransigence of unconscious matter'
> sounds a bit heavy-
I am inclined to rebut that like the Caterpillar in Alice when she suggests
he gets confused
>couldn't it have been just suggested not told/spelled out to us??
(answer a) How? -- I am put in mind of a voxpop man yesterday who said he
couldnt support the strike because there must be a better way of saying it;
but he did not illustrate that
(answer b) should be _Why?_ unless you're going to stick with _sounds a bit
heavy_; my suspicion -- now! it didn't occur to me before -- is that it
would take a lot of words and get heavy itself
(answer c) I am inclined it needs to be asserted though I'll admit it has a
whiff of Stephen Dedalus pretension to it -- ineluctable modality of the
visible" etc
as I said, it seemed just right once I had it in my head
It's different to the intransigence we shall probably both meet today
I at least do have a sense of being at the end of things there... what's
left of a mountain range and now and then a glacial erratic stone; graveyard
full of the drowned blah blah
I don't mind adding a bit of weight
sorry
L
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> From: Poetryetc: poetry and poetics [mailto:[log in to unmask]]
> On Behalf Of Lawrence Upton
> Sent: 30 November 2011 11:11
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> Subject: The bar between The Gugh and St Agnes, seen from St Agnes
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> Crowds of predominantly grey boulders
> are stranded in enormous concentration. Near The Gugh, they have
> crossed over the top of the sands, northwards, and are almost among
> the seaweeds of Perconger.
> This way, they are not quite there.
> They push each other.
> They stand on their fellow heads,
> personifying, in themselves, the intransigence of unconscious matter.
> Time lapses, and still they are here. Time lapses; and they are here
> still, though patterns alter.
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> UNFRAMED GRAPHICS by Lawrence Upton
> 42 pages; A5 paperback; colour cover
> Writers Forum 978 1 84254 277 4
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UNFRAMED GRAPHICS by Lawrence Upton
42 pages; A5 paperback; colour cover
Writers Forum 978 1 84254 277 4
wfuk.org.uk/blog
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