Widdling is the problem
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Subject: Re: St Ives Harbour from Barnoon
I don't see what's wrong with waddling, you waddleist
No other word fits
It's hardly a cliche word
L
On Thu, November 17, 2011 20:08, Douglas Barbour wrote:
> Agree with Sheila, & Stephen. And especially like the mirroring, & then
> those final four lines, their assurance but no waddling....
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> Doug
> On 2011-11-17, at 10:42 AM, Lawrence Upton wrote:
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>> Thank you so much, Sheila
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>> L
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>> On Wed, November 16, 2011 18:40, Sheila Murphy wrote:
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>>> This is sterling, Lawrence. Extremely compelling on multiple levels,
>>> not the least of which is the way that you draw forth one sense by way
>>> of another. Visual and tactile join beautifully, for example. I feel
>>> the movement take pinpoint and waved effort. Very fine, indeed.
>>>
>>> Sheila
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>>> On Wed, Nov 16, 2011 at 6:35 AM, Lawrence Upton <[log in to unmask]>
>>> wrote:
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>>>> White islands glide over battered granite hills;
>>>> and, near sky, top floors, empty, unfinished, without balustrades,
>>>> architecturally complex. Show-through and mirrorings of light
>>>> splashed on to the soft blue of the atmosphere, setting off dark
>>>> blues of harbour and bay.
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>>>> Water's high. It's after five, boats returning,
>>>> all predominantly white; and white seagulls, apparently wandering,
>>>> butterflies. Black back on the roof of Salubrious House. the pine
>>>> glossy in our garden. Two herring gulls floating on the water of the
>>>> bay. Three gulls now. A single boat, two people in it, south-east of
>>>> Smeaton's lighthouse, going north,
>>>> only now becoming visible, but fully seen in the room's mirror. A
>>>> single boat goes south, perhaps to round the pier into harbour, in
>>>> both window and glass; in the mirror; and my memory. More gulls
>>>> butterflying. Wind makes
>>>> the palm shudder. Boats drift at their tethers. Tourists walk past
>>>> in the picture's lower half - I know they're there -- looking with
>>>> envious anger at the houses. A half a million pounds'. More than the
>>>> loss of all one's limbs and eyes. More than a death. A boat is
>>>> gleaned into the mirror's picture, oared, northerly towards a marker
>>>> buoy; a small boat, but this one's under power, overhauls it -- it
>>>> seems some pleasantries exchange - and then departs into the bay's
>>>> core and the further ocean, though, at that size, it'll stay close
>>>> by land. A larger boat, masted, wooden cabin, comes in from the
>>>> direction of Godrevy. A tiny outboard seems to pull aside; and the
>>>> fat boat is only in the mirror, a speedboat following it, but also
>>>> only in the mirror. As water enters the first of Smeaton's arches,
>>>> almost filled by sea-pushed sand, many tourist boats come out,
>>>> kayaks and pedalos and larger craft, in an unheard buzz, the
>>>> stinging insects of evening, a lugger, out from the harbour and
>>>> round the pier then north, smoothly, rapidly, its hue the wide
>>>> wings, with satiate assurance, of a gull waddling dully on a house
>>>> roof.
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>>>> UNFRAMED GRAPHICS by Lawrence Upton
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UNFRAMED GRAPHICS by Lawrence Upton
42 pages; A5 paperback; colour cover
Writers Forum 978 1 84254 277 4
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