Point taken, Patrick; it could perhaps go.
I sent in an earlier response but it seems not to have arrived, though my comment to which Lawrence responded apparently did...
With my new Mail on Mac I dont always see my e-mails when they are replied to, in such a forum as this...
Weird that...
Doug
On 2011-10-19, at 10:54 AM, Patrick McManus wrote:
> Andrew not sure about the last verse-maybe fish? Finish on 'new and old
> meshing' isn't last verse implied in poem?
> Cheers P -who knows nothing!
>
> -----Original Message-----
> From: Poetryetc: poetry and poetics [mailto:[log in to unmask]] On
> Behalf Of Andrew Burke
> Sent: 19 October 2011 14:15
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> Subject: snap: daily narrative
>
> paperbark tree leans too far
> toward the green-top pond
>
> blocking the woodchip path
> so we turn three dogs
>
> to the path less walked
> where the morning glory
>
> wends out over dry limbs
> in the bush, tangling
>
> the Jack Russell's legs
> as she squats to shit.
>
> it's the little events
> that make our days
>
> here in anorther late spring
> life mixing the known
>
> with the unexpected
> new and old meshing
>
> to joy our calendar
> to fill our daily narrative
>
> --
>
> Andrew
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