Interesting point, David.
I think I'd read it in more than one way, depending on mood,
circumstance. Suppose that's always going to be the case.
The line breaks were me unsorting (unpacking) the listical nature of
it. If they also vaguely trace the landform as well ... maybe.
J
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On 07/09/2011, at 4:15 PM, David Bircumshaw wrote:
> Interesting, jill, though it's the kind of piece that makes me want
> to hear
> how the poet would read it
>
> On 7 September 2011 06:15, Jill Jones <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
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>> radon dragonfly springs
>>
>> spirit wind crow finch
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>> yellow bubble algae
>>
>> fallen tree thighbone
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>> paddymelon bush tomato white
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>> gum square jasper
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>> rock whistling afternoon radioactive
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>> ridges many songs
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>> caw caw breathe in
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>> grass of ancient
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>> Paralana Hot Springs (august snap)
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>> On 07/09/2011, at 2:31 PM, andrew burke wrote:
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>> after the pure journey began
>>>
>>> and had to be hosed down and jacketed
>>>
>>> in the three ring circle of the mind
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>>>
>>>
>>> whips cracking thighs pleading
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>> lip syncing to *‘the thing *
>>>
>>> *whether subjective or objective’*
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>> the character of it all
>>>
>>> as built by
>>>
>>> the characters in it all
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>> Andrew
>>> http://hispirits.blogspot.com/
>>> http://www.mullamullapress.**com/QWERTY<http://www.mullamullapress.com/QWERTY
>>> >
>>>
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