the luminescence of the ice skates
lying where poetry in English
made its first major ascent
I'd greatly appreciate feedback as to whether or not
1. it works as a poem?
2. what it means as a critical statement about the history of poetry in
English is clear?
3. its meaning as a critical statement (if clear) makes sense?
It is intended to be both poem, albeit a (very minor) poem-within-a-
larger-poem, and a critical statement.
--Bob
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