I wrote this yesterday and about the time I tried to send it both my ISP
and the email server had electronic strokes of some kind
It took me a while to sort that out and when I had worked it out, two big
variables, I gave up
Try again
Yes, height is relative. You're right. And the sky starts at the ground.
But we don't see it that way. We don't see the sky starting at the ground,
as atmosphere, without an effort, not if we're calling it sky; and it's
easy not to think of height as relative
I did, I now believe, feel that I was looking down into the sky; but I am
not sure that I have brought that into the poem beyond asserting it
I think _within_ is the word; but I am still pondering it
L
On Wed, September 28, 2011 10:56, Patrick McManus wrote:
> I mean isn't height just relative to what's around it -Denmarks highest
> mountain is 172m and at my age mountains are above two storeys Cheers P in
> garden in sunshine waiting for kettle to boil
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> Subject: Re: St Ives Bay from The Malakoff
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> It's good you're reading them!
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> I'm less than happy now with the third word, _into_
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> I'm thinking of _within_
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> The height, you see, isn't that great. No Cornish heights are, not once
> you've been up any kind of a mountain, and Tregenna Hill is a mere bump
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> So I am chewing the cud over this
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> Thanks for your readership
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>
> L
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> On Mon, September 26, 2011 23:32, Douglas Barbour wrote:
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>> I read them all, Lawrence, but dont always have much to say beyond that
>> (as with the next little one),
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>> but I like the 'looking down' here...
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>> Doug
>> On 2011-09-25, at 3:47 AM, Lawrence Upton wrote:
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>>> Looking down into heaped chaotic sky.
>>> Tumbled clothing of watery cloud overcast,
>>> showing much strong white. A small fishing boat slowly disturbs the
>>> tranquilised bay, followed by gulls flying themselves wave height
>>>
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>> Douglas Barbour
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>> Latest books:
>> Continuations (with Sheila E Murphy)
>> http://www.uap.ualberta.ca/UAP.asp?LID=41&bookID=664
>> Wednesdays'
>> http://abovegroundpress.blogspot.com/2008/03/new-from-aboveground-press_
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>> Why poetry? And why not, I asked,
>> my right brain humming sedition.
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>> Phyllis Webb
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> UNFRAMED GRAPHICS by Lawrence Upton
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UNFRAMED GRAPHICS by Lawrence Upton
42 pages; A5 paperback; colour cover
Writers Forum 978 1 84254 277 4
wfuk.org.uk/blog
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Lawrence Upton
Dept of Music
Goldsmiths, University of London
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