Doug - you just may be right. Sometimes in quick drafts the beginning of
another poem actually starts with the end of the failed on. I shall work on
it later. Andrew
On 8 September 2011 00:18, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> I take Dave's point, Andrew, but what I responded to first was the final
> stanza, the phrases at play, being the thing perhaps?
>
> Doug
> On 2011-09-06, at 11:01 PM, andrew burke wrote:
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> > after the pure journey began
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> > and had to be hosed down and jacketed
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> > in the three ring circle of the mind
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> >
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> > whips cracking thighs pleading
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> >
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> > lip syncing to *‘the thing *
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> > *whether subjective or objective’*
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> >
> >
> > the character of it all
> >
> > as built by
> >
> > the characters in it all
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> >
> >
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> > Andrew
> > http://hispirits.blogspot.com/
> > http://www.mullamullapress.com/QWERTY
> >
>
> Douglas Barbour
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> It is natural to speak of your own weaknesses so winsomely they will seem
> strengths, as if everyone else is inadequate if they do not have your
> inadequacies.
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> William H. Gass
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Andrew
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