These do catch a dream scape, Sharon. I wonder if that sense of 'be-ing' caught in a now of 'is' needs all the 'to be' verbs or if some could be dropped...?
I know I tend to be against their use generally, but can see why they usefully capture that sense of it all continhing to happen, now, no escape....
Doug
On 2011-08-10, at 10:40 PM, sharon brogan wrote:
> 1.
>
> I am driving. It is not going well.
> The streets are dark and thickly
> treed. Sleet shines the asphalt.
> The windshield is clouded and
> cracked. Things go wrong.
>
> The car has a mind of its own.
> It will not go where I steer.
> The tires go flat. I cannot see
> where I ‘m going. It’s dangerous
> to drive, but there is nowhere
> to park.
>
>
>
> 2.
>
> I’ve returned to work after a long
> illness. Everything is changed.
> Rooms are not where they were.
> Desks: antique oak, grey industrial
> metal, are piled in the corridors.
> I want to speak with my boss,
> but he has no time for me. I ask
> and ask, but no one will answer:
> What is my job?
>
>
> 3.
>
> I’ve come back to a house where
> I used to live. Though all is different,
> it’s nonetheless familiar. The walls
> are made of many windows. Furniture
> and unpacked boxes crowd the rooms.
> I have a housemate. I know her well,
> but she does not know me. Where are
> my cats, my dogs?
>
>
> 4.
>
> The car finally stops. I think we are close,
> but it’s a long walk. Many city blocks.
> Though it’s night, the streets are brightly
> lit, and dense with pedestrians. Our
> destination is close, I am sure. But what
> is it? How will we know when we’re there?
>
>
> --
> sharon brogan
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