Thanks, Doug. & Max. The caps were just left out of laziness - the
machine I write on places them at the beginning of each line and I
dutifully wipe them off most times. They serve bugger-all purpose. I
tend to write in sentences, with ordinary punctuation - with perhaps
more phrases than traditional texts - so the caps don't fit. But I put
it up quickly after fiddling with a first draft and left 'em there out
of laziness.
Andrew
On 9 June 2011 23:04, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Interesting Andrew.
>
> I see a lot of poems going back to the caps at the beginning of each line these days, but cant understand why. Hmmnn?
>
> I think you can edit down a bit: as: do you need 'I feel' when youve already said 'In my mind'?
>
> Doug
> On 2011-06-09, at 3:27 AM, andrew burke wrote:
>
>> On hard rock ridges in The Kimberley—
>> Red flushed cheekbones on its ancient face—
>> Grooves scar the surface
>> Where Jaru sharpened their spears.
>> Wild extremes of weather
>> Haven’t worn these stone grooves flat,
>> Millennia haven’t erased the patina
>> Of one civilisation before another,
>> The one before us now.
>>
>> In my mind I feel grooves
>> Of dogma, prayers and chants,
>> Delicious incense and the lyrical smell
>> Of candles snuffed after Benediction.
>> Torrential rains have questioned them,
>> Wild winds are weaker than their hold.
>> At night in the yard I stand, evaluating
>> Their mark, their meaning, and turn away
>> Unsatisfied.
>>
>> --
>>
>> All comments welcome, as always.
>>
>> --
>>
>> Andrew
>> http://hispirits.blogspot.com/
>> 'Mother Waits for Father Late' republished available at
>> http://www.picaropress.com/
>> http://www.qlrs.com/poem.asp?id=766
>> http://frankshome.org/AndrewBurke.html
>>
>
> Douglas Barbour
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Andrew
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