I kind of like what youve done here, Max, but wonder if it can be cut a bit more; there's a stilted quality to some of what's presented as speech...? Should it be more like collage somehow? I havent an answer but these questions did occur to me as I read....
Doug
On 2011-05-25, at 6:24 AM, Max Richards wrote:
> The Audit
> (for Chris Jones)
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