Great response, Stephen, I appreciate this, and will take a closer look!
Cheers, Sheila
On Wed, May 18, 2011 at 12:26 PM, Stephen Vincent <[log in to unmask]>wrote:
> For whatever quick reason, Sheila, #1/, feels strained to me.
> The rest I really like - subtle, close & felt with depth.
>
> Stephen V
>
> --- On Wed, 5/18/11, Sheila Murphy <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
> From: Sheila Murphy <[log in to unmask]>
> Subject: Four Observations
> To: [log in to unmask]
> Date: Wednesday, May 18, 2011, 11:31 AM
>
> 1/
> stripes of morning
> sliver across wood floor
> dream lore makes
> a fresh idea
> warm strands of thought
> turn things
> into the substance
> daylight
>
> 2/
> snapdragons litter
> the walk
> I think the thumb
> green with diversion
> an aversion
> to the dust
>
> 3/
> Pomona dampness
> loses trill
> informal frisking equals
> safety
> just in time
> a path to you and your departed
> fractions in the light
>
> 4/
> her on-screen autumn
> view is mine
> so few of us
> limber enough
> to resist the touch
> of balustrade
>
> Sheila E. Murphy
>
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