For whatever quick reason, Sheila, #1/, feels strained to me.
The rest I really like - subtle, close & felt with depth.
Stephen V
--- On Wed, 5/18/11, Sheila Murphy <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
From: Sheila Murphy <[log in to unmask]>
Subject: Four Observations
To: [log in to unmask]
Date: Wednesday, May 18, 2011, 11:31 AM
1/
stripes of morning
sliver across wood floor
dream lore makes
a fresh idea
warm strands of thought
turn things
into the substance
daylight
2/
snapdragons litter
the walk
I think the thumb
green with diversion
an aversion
to the dust
3/
Pomona dampness
loses trill
informal frisking equals
safety
just in time
a path to you and your departed
fractions in the light
4/
her on-screen autumn
view is mine
so few of us
limber enough
to resist the touch
of balustrade
Sheila E. Murphy
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