Thanks, Doug. Point taken. That's the kind of healthy feedback I need right
now. Andrew
On 26 May 2011 02:03, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> I like the snap aspect, Andrew, but wonder if, as prose poem, it could do
> with a small; editing out of the I/we, getting it all into a sort of
> photo/graphed motion, so to speak.
>
> Doug
> On 2011-05-25, at 4:05 AM, andrew burke wrote:
>
> > Oh, I see, it is the time of year for lace faced fungus, woodlice and
> > red-bellied ants, snails that deckle our mail, and trimming the curry
> tree.
> > In the shallow pond across the road a white-faced heron looks for frogs
> and
> > freshwater snails, grateful for anything in this muddy water. We walk by,
> > dogs sniffing the news, looking where new growth grows green and fresh
> from
> > the late summer bushfire. It looks so fresh against the charred black of
> the
> > trunks. In the dried edges of the pond, before its low banks, the council
> > tried a re-vegetation program at the end of summer, but the heat hung on,
> > and now we see the few survivors dusted off by late autumn rain. I
> > straighten bamboo sticks placed to prop up the plants. Last year and the
> > year before that we did the same – small areas of fledgling trees and
> bushes
> > support each other as their root systems tap into the subterranean water
> > sources or spread out laterally to catch what moisture there is just
> below
> > the surface. Perseverance is the name of the game, returning to the earth
> > what is the earth’s. (To be continued.)
> >
> > --
> > Andrew
> > http://hispirits.blogspot.com/
> > 'Mother Waits for Father Late' republished available at
> > http://www.picaropress.com/
> > http://www.qlrs.com/poem.asp?id=766
> > http://frankshome.org/AndrewBurke.html
> >
>
> Douglas Barbour
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> Continuations (with Sheila E Murphy)
> http://www.uap.ualberta.ca/UAP.asp?LID=41&bookID=664
> Wednesdays'
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> http://abovegroundpress.blogspot.com/2008/03/new-from-aboveground-press_10.html
>
> the poem, like the city, destroyed and built again
> and, here and there, remains of history
>
> Chus Pato (trans. Erin Mouré)
>
--
Andrew
http://hispirits.blogspot.com/
'Mother Waits for Father Late' republished available at
http://www.picaropress.com/
http://www.qlrs.com/poem.asp?id=766
http://frankshome.org/AndrewBurke.html
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