Yeah, verily, I like the first one. On instinct alone ... Can't
intellectualise it.
Andrew
On 20 May 2011 15:01, Patrick McManus <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> I understand -read the first version better !!!! 'you resist' is important
> P understood
>
> -----Original Message-----
> From: Poetryetc: poetry and poetics [mailto:[log in to unmask]] On
> Behalf Of sharon brogan
> Sent: 19 May 2011 21:54
> To: [log in to unmask]
> Subject: Re: snapshot 2011 may 18 - &, as often, a sudden revision
>
> I just realized that I'm confused -- which version do you prefer? And -- is
> this poem good enough to post on my blog?
>
> I'm out of practice...
>
> --
> sharon brogan
> http://www.sbpoet.com
> http://www.sbpoet.net
> http://smallpoems.sbpoet.net
> 406.578.1788
>
>
> On Thu, May 19, 2011 at 12:19 AM, andrew burke <[log in to unmask]>
> wrote:
>
> > Yes, let it be - seconded. Andrew
> >
> > On 19 May 2011 04:12, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> >
> > > yes, let it be...
> > >
> > > Doug
> > > On 2011-05-18, at 12:57 PM, sharon brogan wrote:
> > >
> > > > red and yellow tulips
> > > > bloom in the garden
> > > > down-facing hellebore
> > > > lilac buds
> > > >
> > > > so much spring
> > > >
> > > > you have wanted to die
> > > > for so long
> > > >
> > > > your daughters suffer
> > > > i do not suffer
> > > > i wait
> > > >
> > > > a tulip drops
> > > > red petals
> > > > on the dark ground
> > > >
> > > > On Wed, May 18, 2011 at 12:22 PM, sharon brogan <[log in to unmask]>
> > > wrote:
> > > >
> > > >> 2011 May 18
> > > >>
> > > >> red and yellow tulips
> > > >> bloom in the garden
> > > >> down-facing hellebore
> > > >> lilac buds
> > > >>
> > > >> so much spring
> > > >>
> > > >> you have wanted to die
> > > >> for so long
> > > >> now that it’s upon you
> > > >> you resist, you forget
> > > >>
> > > >> your daughters suffer
> > > >> i do not suffer
> > > >> i wait
> > > >>
> > > >> a tulip drops
> > > >> red petals
> > > >> on the dark ground
> > > >>
> > > >>
> > > >> --
> > > >> sharon brogan
> > > >> http://www.sbpoet.com
> > > >> http://www.sbpoet.net
> > > >> http://smallpoems.sbpoet.net
> > > >> 406.578.1788
> > > >>
> > > >>
> > > >
> > > >
> > > > --
> > > > sharon brogan
> > > > http://www.sbpoet.com
> > > > http://www.sbpoet.net
> > > > http://smallpoems.sbpoet.net
> > > > 406.578.1788
> > > >
> > >
> > > Douglas Barbour
> > > [log in to unmask]
> > >
> > > http://www.ualberta.ca/~dbarbour/
> > > http://eclecticruckus.wordpress.com/
> > >
> > > Latest books:
> > > Continuations (with Sheila E Murphy)
> > > http://www.uap.ualberta.ca/UAP.asp?LID=41&bookID=664
> > > Wednesdays'
> > >
> > >
> >
>
> http://abovegroundpress.blogspot.com/2008/03/new-from-aboveground-press_10.h
> tml
> > >
> > > the poem, like the city, destroyed and built again
> > > and, here and there, remains of history
> > >
> > > Chus Pato (trans. Erin Mouré)
> > >
> >
> >
> >
> > --
> > Andrew
> > http://hispirits.blogspot.com/
> > 'Mother Waits for Father Late' republished available at
> > http://www.picaropress.com/
> > http://www.qlrs.com/poem.asp?id=766
> > http://frankshome.org/AndrewBurke.html
> >
>
--
Andrew
http://hispirits.blogspot.com/
'Mother Waits for Father Late' republished available at
http://www.picaropress.com/
http://www.qlrs.com/poem.asp?id=766
http://frankshome.org/AndrewBurke.html
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