Patrick,
If you combined the first two lines, then you'd have two 14 line units with a turn between them. Formally, a concoction which might merit the term "double sonnet".
Barry
On Wed, 13 Apr 2011 07:02:17 +0100, Patrick McManus <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>START
>
>when he
>her old man
>could not start
>the petrol strimmer
>on their allotment
>she did not take kindly
>to his suggestion
>that she should
>flutter her eyelashes
>at the young men
>and told him
>in no uncertain terms
>that he could go
>and flutter
>his own eyelashes
>
>later when
>she returned
>to their plot
>she could hear the
>sound of the strimmer
>and the merry
>chat and laughter
>of a bevy of strapping
>hot strimmer starting
>young women
>and above all
>the cackle of
>one old man
>her old man
>
>
>pmcmanus
>q816
>for Andrew
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