I enjoyed rereading your poem. Altered syntactical relations came to mind. I believe I can imagine your process of composition.
Though your two instructional lines in <> appear when one clicks on your first post of this within the archive, but not when one merely positions the cursor over the link.
Barry
On Thu, 7 Apr 2011 04:11:38 +0000, [log in to unmask] <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>two lines missing from under poem when I sent this
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>repeat
>and change
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>which I enclosed with <>, each. But my webmail probably interpreted it as some
>kind of code and deleted.
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>J
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>________________________
>Jill Jones
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>www.jilljones.com.au
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>----- Original Message -----
>From: [log in to unmask] <[log in to unmask]>
>To: ''Poetryetc : poetry and poetics'' <[log in to unmask]>
>Sent: Thu Apr 7 14:08
>Subject: Fwd: snap - eight lines
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>reap angel
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>dance eat
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>hang and
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>chang p-chang
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>rap a pan
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>gel gel, gel
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>re danger, get
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>rapt, ha
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>________________________
>Jill Jones
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>www.jilljones.com.au
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