On 3/6/2011 10:08 PM, andrew burke wrote:
> Bob, it has vigour and great imaginative leaps and bounds. Only things that
> jarred for my Aussie ears was 'of' after 'off', and the word 'dangerously' -
> Poem needs a more seductive word there I'd say to go with the 'sidling'.
> Just my reactions - others will have a different spin on it no doubt.
>
> Andrew
Thanks, Andrew. I was a little bothered by "off of," too. Different
register, which I usually like but it doesn't sound right here. Will
think about it, and about "dangerously."
--Bob
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