Well, Max, I counted syllables, but though 10 lines with 6 syllables each predominate in the count, I can't find an overall pattern in the stanzas and assume you're not writing syllabics. Although Yvor Winters' interest in Elizabeth Daryush and Robert Bridges as writers of syllabics comes to mind for the first time in ages. Plus my own memory snap of Winters and Janet Lewis walking across campus with their Airedales: "true or imagined?" Barry
On Wed, 23 Mar 2011 23:56:24 +1100, Max Richards <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>Waking at night,
>besieged by memories,
>I hear the clock chime
>the hours and half-hours,
>
>put my mind to making
>sentences, counting
>the syllables, hoping
>next day to jot them down.
>
>Memory snaps they may be,
>and who to check them with? -
>now that my sister's gone -
>true or imagined?
>
>no-one's here or anywhere
>to gainsay what I say.
>That's the old ones -
>as for more recent years,
>
>memories of them seem -
>sparse, colourless,
>neither here nor there...
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