Ha ha.
Thanks,
J
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On 18/02/2011, at 12:33 AM, James Cervantes wrote:
> In a certain mood, this came instantly of your post:
>
> Thank you for your comment, the snap, the verb.
>
>
>
> It was a rework, a reform I did twice longer than a recent form,
>
> a cut-up of my left leg entwined around my right, a fall down stairs,
>
> a practice of a shorter gimp loosely done and tweaked, accounting
>
> for my scattered bounce, a no-no in some places but fun in others.
>
>
> -- Jim
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> On Thu, Feb 17, 2011 at 5:21 AM, Jill Jones <[log in to unmask]>
> wrote:
>
>> Hi Patrick,
>>
>> Thanks for that comment. It was a rework/reform I did today of a
>> twice
>> longer very recent poem. I'd been working on some ideas this week
>> about
>> cut-ups and feeding back one's own work - long story - so as
>> practice I cut
>> up the long poem into something shorter (still long, tho), based
>> loosely on
>> a system, then tweaked every so slightly. So that may account for the
>> scattered bounce.
>>
>> By the way, I liked all the adverbs in your snap this week. They
>> can be a
>> no-no in some places and great fun in others.
>>
>> Cheers,
>> Jill
>>
>>
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>> On 17/02/2011, at 6:09 PM, Patrick McManus wrote:
>>
>> Jill I old oldie enjoyed the cheery scattered bounce of this
>>> P
>>>
>>> -----Original Message-----
>>> From: Poetryetc: poetry and poetics
>>> [mailto:[log in to unmask]] On
>>> Behalf Of Jill Jones
>>> Sent: 17 February 2011 07:02
>>> To: [log in to unmask]
>>> Subject: snap - reformed
>>>
>>> Gem/ weird, reforming
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>> A second is only a sample of how
>>>
>>> a roof becomes rain.
>>>
>>> I've been careless with corsets.
>>>
>>> When the sex machine's on the blink
>>>
>>> turn up yr radio, is it the sound
>>>
>>> of silver pumping?
>>>
>>> There's too much ash and
>>>
>>> not enough syntax
>>>
>>> to make me watch with my baby tonight.
>>>
>>> If prime ministers could shelve their selves we
>>>
>>> could all be walking to boot.
>>>
>>> A mosquito yaps into
>>>
>>> the shimmering yard, if the dark's
>>>
>>> dark that's perception for you, boom tish
>>>
>>> but wait, that's the milky way
>>>
>>> staggering up there.
>>>
>>> Ladies and gentlemen, here's to the aliens
>>>
>>> yes to all those yeses.
>>>
>>> The rose isn't as ancient as its seed
>>>
>>> but it opens, dung is juice
>>>
>>> and the zapper is broken.
>>>
>>> But you can't recall your species anymore
>>>
>>> they won't listen.
>>>
>>> Succumbing isn't an answer
>>>
>>> nor is it a question
>>>
>>> and you could be right
>>>
>>> or frustrated by imagination.
>>>
>>> Let's fall without sleeping this once.
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>> Sydney 17 Feb
>>>
>>> __________________________
>>> Jill Jones
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>>>
>>> website: www.jilljones.com.au
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>>>
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