the real here is terrible, Chris, but the poem is still perhaps too obvious (too 'straight'?).
I think you could edit down a bit, at least:
the oppression of being homosexual
to
that oppression
with the indented line following on...
Doug
On 2011-02-09, at 1:55 AM, Chris Jones wrote:
> Monday
>
> my younger gay brother's birthday
>
> he would be 47 today, had he lived
>
> the oppression of being homosexual
>
> being told rather you
> were dead. His partner cannot cancel his phone account.
> He is not recognised. The telecommunication corporation lets the account
> grow larger, a thousand dollars will it reach. And grow some more.
> Making money from the dead.
>
> His partner rang me, his next of kin, to stop the growing debt of his
> death.
>
>
>
>
> --
> have chronic fatigue syndrome so may be delayed in reply or brain fog weird
>
> just to let you know that's all, Chris Jones.
>
> Blog: http://abdevpoetics.blogspot.com/
>
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