I'm just gong to agree with Barry here, Lawrence. I liked that line
too, & then that turn to the last line. The sense of repeating without
actually doing so works too....
Doug
On 7-Dec-10, at 3:41 PM, Barry Alpert wrote:
> Very fine. Though I looked up the dictionary definition of the
> title upon first reading it, I really didn't need to do so since you
> define susurration both semantically and musically within the eight
> lines of the poem. I keep returning to the line unit "attempting
> tempting secrecy" for the witty turn it enacts, while your last line
> provides a strong yet paradoxical conclusion.
>
> Barry
>
>
> On Tue, 7 Dec 2010 12:14:10 -0000, Lawrence Upton
> <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
>> A low soft sound as of
>> whispering or muttering;
>> gossip; a whisper; a rustling;
>> clatter of soft woodenness
>> banging off against itself,
>> attempting tempting secrecy
>> as it repeats itself
>> wrong through the winter
>>
>>
>> --
>> Three poems in Volume 4 Issue 1 'Peripatetica: The Poetics of
>> Walking':
>> http://www.landscapeandlanguagecentre.au.com/current_journal.html
>> *
>> http://www.cordite.org.au/poetry/creativecommons/poems-for-ivor-cutler-3
>> http://www.cordite.org.au/poetry/cc-the-remixes/the-man-who-finds-himself-amusing
>>
>>
>> "This is not a time for foolery, or compliments. It may be that
>> both of us
>> are within a few minutes of death... And I, at any rate, don't
>> propose to
>> die with polite insincerities in my mouth. "
>> C S Lewis - That Hideous Strength
>> ---
>> Lawrence Upton
>> AHRC Creative Research Fellow
>> Dept of Music
>> Goldsmiths, University of London
>
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