Thanks everyone! I'll keep plodding away at the poem. There are parts I like about it.
I was working with a prompt and the part about conversations made me think of all the newstories of tragedies that could have been prevented, accidents in factories, fires, even terrorism and war. Grateful conversations that should have taken place.
Millicent
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aha, Doug says exactly what I wanted to say but was too reticent
Janet
On 16 December 2010 02:28, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> The poem is a powerful elegy, Millicent, although I'm not sure about the
rise of the final two lines, whether or not the poem really sustains that.
Also, I dont get the 'grateful conversations' aspect; why that title?
Doug
On 14-Dec-10, at 6:13 PM, Millicent wrote:
Grateful Conversations Never Had
> Hamim Group garment factory in Ashulia, Dec. 2010
>
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