I'd agree that although Patrick's version 'works' it isnt the same as
nor does it do the same work as Sharon's original.
Doug
Quoting "Bob Grumman" <[log in to unmask]>:
> On 12/4/2010 8:09 AM, Patrick McManus wrote:
>> Snow
>> Garden
>> Bird tracks
>
> That's an okay haiku, but nowhere near as good as the other--in my
> /expert!/ view. (I've actually got a 200-page book out on the haiku.)
>
> --Bob
>
>
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