Yes.I agree, Stephen.
It becomes a kind fo haiku then, with so much unsaid but there.
Doug
Quoting "Stephen Vincent" <[log in to unmask]>:
> Sharon, I like the exp with emptiness in the breaks between the
> words fore and aft in the last two lines, then the bird tracks.
> Gives good physical manifestation to the opening commentary. Which,
> tho informative, might be totally dropped. Stephen --- On Wed,
> 12/1/10, sharon brogan <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
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> From: sharon brogan <[log in to unmask]>
> Subject: Snap
> To: [log in to unmask]
> Date: Wednesday, December 1, 2010, 10:30 AM
>
> There are ways to be overcome with grief -- one breaks down, cries always;
> or -- one shuts down, feels nothing, except silent, disconnected tears on
> the face, in the morning, in the evening -- grief without feeling, without
> content.
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> It's only habit that holds me together.
>
>
> on
> the snow
>
> in
> the garden
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>
> bird tracks
>
>
Douglas Barbour
11655 - 72 Avenue NW
Edmonton Alberta T6G 0B9
That’s not a cross look it’s a sign of life
Frank O’Hara
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