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From: "Chris Jones" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Tuesday, December 28, 2010 1:08 AM
Subject: bbq fragment
> (This is a hard one to get right, considering Spinoza wrote; we do not
> yet know what a human body can do and as Nietzsche above all understood,
> physical illnesses of the human body as active forces.)
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> he sat alone eating lunch
> 2 boiled eggs, thinly sliced,
> balsamic vinegar, mustard and oil
> dressed salad with a glass
> of multiple gold awarded wine
> the colour of vitamin B urine
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I think this is excellent, a cold sudden shock. Suggest hyphenating
"multiple-gold-awarded" to speed up that line further. And why "bbq"
fragment? In the US "bbq" primarily means "barbeque." Is that what you
mean? Too off-the-wall for this poem.
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