On Sun, 2010-12-19 at 18:24 -0500, Mark Weiss wrote:
> As the cat disembowels it and begins to feed.
May I suggest you drop/delete the "it" in this line? It doesn't seem
needed to me. Rather nice long poem, BTW. (I liked it.)
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have chronic fatigue syndrome so may be delayed in reply or brain fog weird
just to let you know that's all, Chris Jones.
Blog: http://abdevpoetics.blogspot.com/
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