This time I did change it, a bit sparer, same shape, just a bit darker. On my FB notes page.
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Ken Wolman http://awfulrowing.wordpress.com/
"All writers are hunters, and parents are the most available prey."
--Francine du Plessix Gray
On Oct 20, 2010, at 1:24 PM, Ken Wolman wrote:
> I rebroke the first line awhile ago. In the meantime the poem stands. Ten poets, eleven opinions.
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> KW
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> Ken Wolman http://awfulrowing.wordpress.com/
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> "All writers are hunters, and parents are the most available prey."
> --Francine du Plessix Gray
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> On Oct 20, 2010, at 10:34 AM, Douglas Barbour wrote:
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>> Aside form also thinking that you forgot to break the fist line, Ken, I kinda agree with Andrew, & add that perhaps you can move into a more active voice:
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>> At home the frozen vodka bottle
>> sang to me in the voices of
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>> sort of thing...?
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>> Gets to the core of the situation, though; just you can get there faster, harder?
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>> Doug
>> On 19-Oct-10, at 4:56 PM, Ken Wolman wrote:
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>>> BAR DRINKER
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>> Douglas Barbour
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>> http://www.ualberta.ca/~dbarbour/
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>> Latest books:
>> Continuations (with Sheila E Murphy)
>> http://www.uap.ualberta.ca/UAP.asp?LID=41&bookID=664
>> Wednesdays'
>> http://abovegroundpress.blogspot.com/2008/03/new-from-aboveground-press_10.html
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>> There was the usual amount of corruption, intimidation, and rioting.
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>> Sir Charles Petrie
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