Thanks, Doug. I meant 'they' to refer to the moths: originally I had the
'verb and noun/noun and verb' lines first ,then 'they take turns/turn in my
head' - but the two turn(s) together seemed ultra clumsy so I distanced
them, shuffling in the n/v lines. Yes, the first and the third are the vital
verses, but I feel they need a bridge. I'll think more.
A lot of explanation for such a small Snap! Ha ha ...
Andrew
On 27 October 2010 22:58, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Intriguing, Andrew.
>
> Not sure of that 'they' & not even sure you need the 2nd stanza (maybe i
> want your head only implied)....
>
> but the 3rd, yes.
>
> Doug
>
> On 27-Oct-10, at 2:34 AM, andrew burke wrote:
>
> cabbage moths -
>> stark white against
>> grey clouds - cavort
>> in a brisk afternoon breeze
>>
>> verb and noun
>> they take turns
>> noun and verb
>> turn in my head
>>
>> Wittgenstein holds
>> the lollipop at
>> the crossing of two
>> schools of thought
>>
>>
>>
>>
>>
>> --
>> Andrew
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>> http://frankshome.org/AndrewBurke.html
>>
>>
> Douglas Barbour
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