Fist line is that some new Canadian term??
:-)
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Sent: 20 October 2010 15:35
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Aside form also thinking that you forgot to break the fist line, Ken,
I kinda agree with Andrew, & add that perhaps you can move into a more
active voice:
At home the frozen vodka bottle
sang to me in the voices of
sort of thing...?
Gets to the core of the situation, though; just you can get there
faster, harder?
Doug
On 19-Oct-10, at 4:56 PM, Ken Wolman wrote:
> BAR DRINKER
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