Thanks, Doug. You may be right.
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From: "Douglas Barbour" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Friday, July 02, 2010 1:31 PM
Subject: Re: 3
> Like 1 & 3, especially the latter, Fred, but 2 feels too all over the
> place, rambling & somewhat unfocused for me.
>
> It seems like there's no specific target there, & your poems seem best
> when aimed at specific targets...
>
> Doug
>
> Douglas Barbour
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> http://www.ualberta.ca/~dbarbour/
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> Latest books:
> Continuations (with Sheila E Murphy)
> http://www.uap.ualberta.ca/UAP.asp?LID=41&bookID=664
> Wednesdays'
> http://abovegroundpress.blogspot.com/2008/03/new-from-aboveground-press_10.html
>
> because I want to die
>
> writing Haiku
>
> or, better,
>
> long lines, clean and syllabic as knotted bamboo. Yes!
>
> Phyllis Webb
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