Like 1 & 3, especially the latter, Fred, but 2 feels too all over the
place, rambling & somewhat unfocused for me.
It seems like there's no specific target there, & your poems seem best
when aimed at specific targets...
Doug
Douglas Barbour
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Latest books:
Continuations (with Sheila E Murphy)
http://www.uap.ualberta.ca/UAP.asp?LID=41&bookID=664
Wednesdays'
http://abovegroundpress.blogspot.com/2008/03/new-from-aboveground-press_10.html
because I want to die
writing Haiku
or, better,
long lines, clean and syllabic as knotted bamboo. Yes!
Phyllis Webb
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