I arrogantly chopped it up to suit my taste, Max. 'Lovely' is a summary word
which says nothing. And there were a few tautologies. Excuse me if I hqave
offended.
His daughter was like a new
version of her mother, graceful.
With so few words, her best
task was sitting for Dad
while he sculpted intently.
A speaking likeness? Never -
mute as sculptures are:
her smile, noble forehead,
withheld pain, hinting at
a hope, a chance
of expression.
On 9 June 2010 10:28, Millicent <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> I think you can start the poem with "was lovely" since the title nicely
> serves as the first line.
>
> The Sculptoršs Daughter
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> Was lovely, like a new
> version of her mother, graceful
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>
>
> Millicent
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>
> -----Original Message-----
> From: Max Richards <[log in to unmask]>
> To: [log in to unmask]
> Sent: Tue, Jun 8, 2010 4:33 pm
> Subject: snap: the sculptor's daughter
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>
>
> The Sculptoršs Daughter
>
> is daughter was lovely, like a new
> ersion of her mother, graceful
> but almost silent with so few words
> er best task was sitting for Dad
> while he lovingly sculpted.
> speaking likeness? Never,
> but mute as sculptures are,
> hey represent her well:
> her smile, her noble forehead,
> uch pain, something withheld,
> hinting a lurking hope
> chance of expression.
>
> Max Richards
>
>
>
--
Andrew
http://hispirits.blogspot.com/
'Mother Waits for Father Late' republished available at
http://www.picaropress.com/
http://www.qlrs.com/poem.asp?id=766
http://frankshome.org/AndrewBurke.html
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