Striking, powerful. Not waving but archetyping, eh? That last injunction
against "carrying / The bloody head of a calf," and the speaker's principled
rejection of it, have a weird inevitability. Only one suggestion: just
"red," not "blood-red."
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From: "Brian Hawkins" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Wednesday, May 05, 2010 7:36 AM
Subject: Beach Snap
BEACH
Always tell somebody where you are going.
I told noone.
Never swim alone.
I swam alone.
Never go swimming at dawn or dusk.
I entered the water as the setting sun
Dyed every wave blood red.
Stay clear of large concentrations of fish, and areas
Where birds are diving into the water.
I swam into a bait-ball.
Avoid violent splashing motions
Which could be misconstrued.
I thrashed around.
Never enter the water carrying
The bloody head of a calf. It
Was the hind-quarters.
Report any attacks immediately.
I report nothing.
Brian
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