andrew burke wrote:
> Definitely worth working on! I'd edit out -
>
>> nor a good poem either--even Rilke
>> might not have managed the Sonnets
>> if Kathy had been his only model.
>>
>
> Which would then necessitate a rewrite of the last verse - with great
> lines, but in need of a new seque ...
>
> Glad to see you in such good poetic trim, Ken.
>
Well, you seem far kinder than the work appears to deserve. I just got
hold of the thought and refused to let it go before I wrote *some*thing.
The doomed Ms Fiscus indeed came back to me as a prominent occupant of
my memories.
kw
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