Hmmnnn, probably that old lyric closure at work there, Andrew & Fred.
Yep, I'll think on taking it out....
Thanks all
Doug
On 30-Sep-09, at 7:28 PM, andrew burke wrote:
> Yes, Doug, I am there, hearing the voice wafting into the elevator.
> I agree
> with Fred: the last line is too tidy and closes off the active
> image, still
> constant and still craving.
>
> Andrew
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