Sharon, it is a deceptively simple poem, beautifully controlled and
rhythmically stated. Thanks for sharing it. Andrew
2009/7/30 David Bircumshaw <[log in to unmask]>
> yes, especially as the reason I grew taller in English is that, unlike ich
> or io or je, I had shrank to only one letter and could so easily be missed,
> overlooked, and left out quite. Ah woe is so. But as for 'ego' , it's all
> lower-case.
>
>
> 2009/7/29 Judy Prince <[log in to unmask]>
>
> > Lovely, striking meaningful opposites [wet/dry; surface/undersurface; 2
> > families; then/now; dire warnings/warm homecomings]---all which floats in
> > sight above and below consciousness.
> > Why not capitalise "I"? Despite other caps being absent, a lower-case
> > personal pronoun jars [me, at least], when I'd rather stay in the poem,
> not
> > stand outside it looking at a tiny "i".
> >
> > Best,
> >
> > Judy
> >
> > 2009/7/29 sharon brogan <[log in to unmask]>
> >
> > > today it's the koi
> > > catching the light
> > > as they emerge from dark water
> > >
> > > your family, my family
> > > at the surface of dreams
> > > so thin, that skin
> > >
> > > between today, and then
> > > i go back, again
> > > and again, i reach
> > >
> > > for you but grasp
> > > nothing but fog, opaque
> > > and elusive, i wonder
> > >
> > > how they will ever get me up
> > > on that horse, the ranch
> > > dry, as it always was
> > >
> > > snakes in the sagebrush
> > > rattling their warning
> > > the deep bell ringing
> > >
> > > cows coming home
> > > home, home -- one kiss
> > > that's all i ask
> > >
> >
>
>
>
> --
> David Bircumshaw
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Andrew
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