I like this poem a lot Max
I'm not familiar with Sun Kil Moon,
but to me the poem created a somewhat John Tranter-ish atmosphere (the period detail, the stylised dialogue, the literary ambience)
and the slight non-sequitur of the last couplet is great
Brian
--- On Thu, 4/6/09, Max Richards <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> From: Max Richards <[log in to unmask]>
> Subject: Re: snap: her old room
> To: [log in to unmask]
> Received: Thursday, 4 June, 2009, 8:41 AM
> Thanks, folks, for helpful
> responses.
>
> There's something *very* Mark Kozelek about this one
> (compare
> "Moorestown", by Sun Kil Moon...)
>
> Dominic
>
> This has led me to a new area for me, thanks Dominic.
> Angel, as Judy hints, creates surprises...
>
> Pacing and spacing continue to trouble me.
>
> Max
>
>
> Quoting Judy Prince <[log in to unmask]>:
>
> > "Do you poets ever do the immaculate corpse where
> someone writes a
> > verse and everyone ads on?" I think you've
> already begun it, Angel!
> > Judy
> >
> > 2009/6/3 Angel Marquez <[log in to unmask]>
> >
> > > Wow, I knew her, I knew her very well. Instead of
> tattooing her name across
> > > my heart I tattooed the word "Broken" and the sun
> still wears away the
> > > yellow paint to those bricks that holds those
> memories.
> > > Neat. Do you poets ever do the immaculate corpse
> where someone writes a
> > > verse and everyone ads on?
> > >
> > > On Tue, Jun 2, 2009 at 10:27 PM, Max Richards
> <[log in to unmask]>
> > > wrote:
> > >
> > > > Snap: Her Old Room
> > > >
> > > > At her parents’ pale yellow brick
> house,
>
>
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