thanks, Stephen. Same good advice also just in b-c from Andrew Burke...
Max
Quoting Stephen Vincent <[log in to unmask]>:
> Strong, Max - I would leave out the line with the name of the disease - does
> not seem required.
>
> Stephen V
> http://stephenvincent.net/blog/
>
> --- On Wed, 6/24/09, Max Richards <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
> From: Max Richards <[log in to unmask]>
> Subject: late snap
> To: [log in to unmask]
> Date: Wednesday, June 24, 2009, 10:47 PM
>
> She is in the hospice,
> while he goes to and fro;
>
> her sweet voice taken from her,
> along with much else,
>
> by motor neurone disease.
> Still on their answer-phone
>
> that voice, recorded long since,
> recites her ‘mobile’ number,
>
> ‘in case of urgency’. Once,
> I recall, she played Desdemona
>
> for an audience of students,
> and now I seem to hear her still,
>
> pleading gently against
> the wrongness of the dark.
>
>
> Max Richards
> Doncaster, Victoria
>
>
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