Andrew -
you are so right about my form.
I sometimes think I can only dance in clogs.
Not even real couplets.
Dramatize, dramatize, as Henry James used to say.
I named the wrong river - the Clarence flooded Grafton, the Wilsons River
threatened Lismore.
I still don't know how to pronounce antechinus.
Quoting andrew burke <[log in to unmask]>:
> Max - a relaxed rolling narrative with lots of story appeal and humanity.
> But, Max, is the couplet form the right verse form to relate it in? It seems
> to me you'd have more chance to vary the line lengths and to invigorate the
> pace of the poem with a long mainly uninterrupted poem, using end-stopped
> and flow-on lines in building combinations, in variance of calm breath and
> more breathlessness, to create a more dramatic sense. Of course, it may just
> be a case of me telling you how I'd do it, but I hope I'm being more
> objective than that.
>
> Breakfast is ready, so I must go.
>
> Andrew
>
> 2009/5/27 Max Richards <[log in to unmask]>
>
> > Holiday Snap with Antechinus
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