hey there Brian!
a snap is loosely defined; some general characteristics that I've observed
are that it's either a speed-written poem, a first draft of a poem, or
something else relatively ex-tempore. seems that this fits the bill.
I enjoyed the poem (or snap) too; the imagery is slightly grubby & quite
evocative. I see the tonal idea with using "plonked their arse...", but it
really detracts from the feel of the rest of the poem for me. I love the
river=dog image, and the blazing maples (for heightened assonance, you might
consider removing 'sugar'?).
thanks for this, and welcome.
KS
2009/5/22 Brian Hawkins <[log in to unmask]>
> The great swamping rains came
> And plonked their arse
> Right over Bellingen.
>
> Summer evaporated
> Into woodsmoke as the river
> Rose up like an angry brown dog
>
> Snapping at falling leaves,
> And the sugar maples blazed
> On the highway with noone to see them.
>
>
>
> I'm new to this list. Could someone tell me what a snap is? Is this poem
> a snap? It even has the word snap in it! sort of.
>
> No spring down here (subtropical NSW), autumn full bore flooding our little
> valleys.
>
> Brian
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