Powerful feeling here, Max. And something a lot of us will know.
I'm wondering about the passive in the 4th stanza:
The work he intended
he almost carried through.
OR
The work he intended
he has almost carried through.
?
Doug
On 28-Apr-09, at 4:52 PM, Max Richards wrote:
> I am well and he is dying.
> He is in pain and I am not.
>
> I am old and he is not.
> He was strong as I was never.
>
> I took it easy
> while he worked on.
>
> The work he intended has
> almost been carried through.
>
> Friendly colleagues will
> see it completed.
>
> Doctors and nurses have done
> everything they could.
>
> His pain has been eased.
> His family has gathered.
>
> His friends are on hand.
> He is smiling his goodbyes.
>
>
> Max Richards
>
>
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